Response to my First Comments

Kate:
Thank you for more ideas on how to expand on my "paper". I liked how you brought up new questions that I didn't even ask myself. It brought me new insights on how I should keep writing and editing my essay.

Charles:
Thank you for posting such a long comment on a small incomplete post. I liked how you pointed out one question that I should focus on because it had a great impact on how you think. I think I am going to take that question and expand on it to make a better essay. The way that you put your thoughts on how that question affected you made me think more about the possible ways I can answer it.